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Re: Michelle's Story (Just kept Going) Chapter 2
Please excuse paragraph layout;once again, its the site! A man walked into a bar. Work’s been tough. He checks the time, it’s 1:45. ‘Right, old boy, you’ve got forty-five minutes ...
Nov 16, 2009 -
Re: Can you hear me?
Hi. Your poem was good. Is it about a girl who was unknown and then went on to well for herself? Is it a true story? I like the way ...
Nov 14, 2009 -
Re: Calling All Heroes
Hi. Your poem had really strong imagery. It was a powerful poem with strong emotions. I perseved the boy as a teenager who is in a downward spiral and can't ...
Nov 14, 2009 -
Re: Sunday Solitude
Hi. I liked your poem. I think that your poem isn't about a loved one as it first seemed, more of a object...or himself? That the 'prize' is on his ...
Nov 14, 2009 -
Re: Dead Among the Monkey Bars
Hi. Your poem was good, I enjoyed it. Although, me and my nan saw it as two different things. Me, a child now grown up and looking back on his ...
Nov 14, 2009 -
Re: Michelle's Story (Title needs revising!)
Hi. Thankyou for all your comments! I will definately take them on board. As I'm carrying on the story can anyone think of any tiles for it? It would be ...
Nov 4, 2009 -
Re: Michelle's Story (Title needs revising!)
I have just noticed that I put When they got to the end of the path Not when she did, so please leave that out in your comments. Also, the ...
Nov 3, 2009 -
Re: Michelle's Story (Title needs revising!)
I wrote this beginning after I had a dream about it. I might carry on; depends how good the comments are! Title needs revising, please state in your comments. Hope ...
Nov 3, 2009 -
Re: Dried Apricots
Hi. I loved your poem. It sounded like an odd-ball from the title but, when I read it, it was good! It had me rembering stuff that brought back memories...even ...
Nov 3, 2009 -
Re: The Accidental Run-In
Hi. I'm now going to write you quite a long review as the ratio has just gone up...damn, that's annoying! Your story was good. Quite a lot of sentences that ...
Nov 3, 2009 -
Re: Pain Forever Gone
Hi. I liked your poem.You can tell it is true. Sorry it is, whatever happened. I got a little confused on why she left him, who he was and what ...
Nov 1, 2009 -
Re: a rose for the abused..
Hi. I loved your poem. It was vivid and clear. It was also subtle yet at the same time, hard hitting. The 2 by 4 doesn't seem to be the ...
Nov 1, 2009 -
Re: Lonely man. Desperate.
Hey. I like it, but ive already read it!!! Any new ones? Let me know... x
Oct 27, 2009 -
Re: Fire Angel
No! It's the exact same poem! What have you added? x
Oct 25, 2009 -
Re: Mr Wrong
This poems getting published in a book! Hope you like it as much as the judges did! I thought you were with me; you disappeared without a trace, I thought ...
Oct 24, 2009
